Thursday, October 1, 2009

topic sentance - Alex Coles

in the story "The Lady or the Tiger"it sounds like what the princess finds most important is how she would feel if her lover got taken away, because the story never mentions how the man would feel about either punishment.

Revised:
In the story "The Lady or the Tiger," it sounds like what the princess values most is how devastated she would be if she had to see her lover with another woman, she would rather not have him at all.

What I Learned:
I learned that in a topic sentence, its better to keep it short and to the point.

3 comments:

  1. good point! Maybe you could add how she would feel if he did get taken away.

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  2. Good job because it is a complex sentence but maybe you tell how she feels.

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  3. I agree with you and I think it kind of sux that she loses her loverly either way its a loss loss situation. and i would just go with what you first said and leave out the because part cuz thats hooking the reader.

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