Wednesday, October 7, 2009

i larned that even though you want your reader to be informed dont try and cram everything into your tpic sentence or else it will be to long

Tuesday, October 6, 2009

the lady and the tiger

The princess values her life the most,and all she cares about is herself, if she cant have something,(like the man), no one will.


I learned that a topic sentence has to be one sentence. Before i thought it could be two or three.
In the short story "The Lady or the Tiger" the princess most values having a relationship with this man. She does not want anyone with him but her, even if this means death for him.

Friday, October 2, 2009

the lady or the tiger :)

In "The Lady or the Tiger" a semi-barbaric princess is forced to choose her lovers fate. He could be eaten alive by a tiger or married to a beautiful woman just by picking a door. Considering the princess is very jealous of the woman that was behind the "lucky" door the princess was more likely to pick the door with the tiger.
The lady or The Tiger

What the princess most values is that she can be with the man she wants to be with and that no one else can have him

Lady or the Tiger ;)

Princesses are looked upon as royal, respected, and valuable. The princess in "The Lady or the Tiger" most values herself because she would rather see her lover eaten alive then watch him be married to another girl.

Revision:

Princesses are looked upon as royal, respected, and valuable. The princess in "The Lady or the Tiger" most values herself because she would rather see her lover eaten alive then watch him be married to another girl. This princess, like her father, is semi-barbaric which also contributes to her vile decision.

What I learned:
I learned that it is always acceptable to use more detail.

Lady or the tiger:)!

The princess values the love of her life "the man". She wants to be with him but she cant, he either dies from the tiger or lives and gets married to the woman that the princess hates.
In the short story The Lady or The Tiger? by frank Stockton the princess values her pride the most because if the lover was married to the girl it would be an insult to her and she often dreamed what she would feel like to have to watch the ceremony.

revised: In the short story The Lady or The Tiger? by Frank Stockton the princess values her pride the most because if the lover was married to the girl it would be an insult to her.

topic sentence <(o_O)>

in the story "The lady or the tiger" a man accused of loving a princess is sentanced to choose between two doors. One containing a tiger the second containing a woman that if chosen the man will have to marry. once in the arena the man looks towards the princess and the princess gives him what door to pick. sence she values her love with the man the most she told him to pick the door with the tiger.

The princess values her love with the man. so she knows he would rather die then not be with her

I learned its ok to not know what you learned.

Thursday, October 1, 2009

Princess's values

The Princess had two greatest values about her decision. One was her lover that was being sent in the kings arena, and the other is if she really want him to be with another women or have a brutal death.

REVISED: In the story, "The Lady or the Tiger," the princess values her own happiness more then seeing her lover belong to someone else.

What i learned from the comments is to just have more of a simple sentence instead of having everything cramped and trying to fit it all into one sentence.

Randy E.

In the Lady Or The Tiger, the princess most values her lover and this is shown by the way she is acting about the odds of him dying or being with someone else.


In the story " The Lady Or The Tiger," I think the princess only values her own happiness because she would rather her lover die than be with somone else.

I learned that even the people we love can turn on us and want us to die.

paiged

In the "Lady or the Tiger" by Frank Stocton, the princess most values love because she cares about her lover and wants him to be happy and not any harm wished upon him.

Revised: The princess most values love because she cares about her love, and if any harm was wished upon him she would be devastated because when you truly love someone you would rather them be happy than dead.

I learned that a topic sentence is not supposed to summarize the story, and that you don't want to just state what the paragraph is about, you want to add detail, thoughts, and feelings.

The lady or the tiger topic sentance

The princess values trust the most because she knew that her lover would trust her to guide him to the correct door.


Revised; The slightly barbaric princess values trust the most because she knew that her condemned loved would trust her to guide him to the better of the two fates.


I learned that i should not just summarize the story, but i should also tell my thoughts about it so it can be more detailed. I also need to have a very interesting opening line to pull readers into my story.

The Lady or the Tiger Topic scentence

In the short story The Lady or the Tiger the princess values many things, but I believe the thing she values most is her lover.

Revised: In the short story The Lady or the Tiger the princess could value justice, her father,or her lover, but the thing she values most? Her lover.

What I learned: From the comments I didn't really learn much. Sorry but they were just complements and questions nothing too helpful. but thanks for the input.

AJ's topic sentence

In the story The Lady and the tiger, a princess makes a choice between life or love; her love was more important because she could not stand not being with her love.


Revised: In the story The Lady and tiger a semi-barbaric princess has to make the decision between a live and her personal love; her love was more important to her, she couldn't stand being separated from her love.

What I learned: I learned that I needed to clarify a bit more than what I had originally. I also have to put a few more small words in my sentences like: a, and, to, or but.

The Lady or the Tiger Topic Sentence

The princess values the power of a woman's will because she had brought the secret to the prince and who was behind the door, the lady or the tiger?



REVISE:


In the short story, "The Lady or the Tiger" the princess values her instinct because even though opened the door with the tiger here, she couldn't stand the prince with another women.


What did i learn?

I
learned that its okay not to learn, because i did not learn anything.

HaydenC

The princes most values her appearance because as a princess, how she is viewed in the eyes of others is ideal.

Revised: The princess most values the way that she feels about her lover which is, if she can't have him nobody should be able to.

I learned that I need to answer the question better because the first time I didn't really answer the question.

topic sentance - Alex Coles

in the story "The Lady or the Tiger"it sounds like what the princess finds most important is how she would feel if her lover got taken away, because the story never mentions how the man would feel about either punishment.

Revised:
In the story "The Lady or the Tiger," it sounds like what the princess values most is how devastated she would be if she had to see her lover with another woman, she would rather not have him at all.

What I Learned:
I learned that in a topic sentence, its better to keep it short and to the point.

SaSha M topiic sentence

The princess values herself and who she loves, she wants to keep her love but she does not want anyone else to have him.


revised:

In the story "The Lady or The Tiger" the kings daughter the princess, fell madly in love with a man. The king did not approve of his daughters affairs with this man, the man ended up on trial he was to pick one door out of two depending on which one he picked would decide his Fiat, behind one of the doors there is a dangerous tiger and behind the other door is a beautiful woman, the princess is very unhappy because she doesn't want him to die but she doesn't want to see him Marie another woman except her.

What i learned:
I learned that what you first right can be fixed and model into a better sentence or whatever you are writing. I also learned that it is acceptable to use detail.

Topic Sentence Jordy S

The princess mostly values and cares for is the man, the door he opens and how peaple see her as royalty.


New and improved sentence-
In the book
the lady or the tiger by Frank Stockson the princess valued the love of her life (the man). Her love ended in trial because of the king that did not like him; so he had to pick between two doors (lady or tiger). She cared about what door he opens but also cared about how she was seen as royalty.

What i learned...
-to catch the readers attention somehow
-good thing to write the author's name and title of book
-include details

kenziee

Out of all of the values of the princess, her greatest value is youth, because of the importance of her youth, and her lovers youth.

In "The Lady and the Tiger," the princess has many values including youth; her and her lover were both young and fair, which was very important to the princess.

What I learned was to explain and put more detail into what your opinion is on a subject.

Sharon S.

In the short story "lady or the tiger", she most values her lover and doesn't wish to give him up and their love is forbidden so she has to show him which door to open.

ErikaK

In the short story "The Lady or The Tiger" by Frank Stockton, the semi-barbaric Princess, most values her pride, in which led her to choose the tiger for her lover; because she could not stand to have her lover with another women.



Revised: In the short story, "The Lady or The Tiger" by Frank Stockton, the semi-barbaric Princess, most values her pride; which led her to choose the tiger for her lover.



What Did You Learn?
I learned that sometimes less is more. Like in my first sentence, I went on and on. My group members told me i could take out some words and it would still have the same effect. Also i think the reason why our topic sentences for "The Utterly Perfect Murder" are better then the ones for "The Lady and The Tiger" is because we had more time and there was an example. Plus we knew that this one was for like a test, so that could have stressed some people out.





Matt E.

In "The Lady or the Tiger" the princess values that the boy of her dreams is safe because he is the boy of her dreams.



Revised: In "The Lady or the Tiger" the princess values that the boy of her dreams is safe because she likes him to much to watch him die.





I learned to add more at the beginning and to think about more descriptive verbs to use.

lady and the tiger nikki H.

In the story "The lady or the tiger" by Frank Stockton the princess most values her lover because she does not want him to get eatin by the tiger. She would rather see him with another girl than eatin by the tiger


Revised: In the story " The lady or the tiger", the princess most values her lover because she does not want him to be with the other women. Although, She does not want to loose her lover, she would prefer her lover with the other women over him being eaten by the tiger.

revised the final time: In the story " The lady or the tiger", the princess most values her lover because she does not want to loose her lover but she would prefer her lover with the other women than him being eaten by the tiger.

Lady or Tiger TS by KNS

In the short story, "The Lady or the Tiger" by Frank Stockton, the princess is semi-barbaric; however, she values love the most.

lady and the tigetr toppic sentence

The princess in "Lady or the Tiger" most values the love she had with her lover and she did what she could to keep him from being with another woman, because she was also jealous.

i learned that in writing a toppic sentence you have to write something that gives a preview of the rest of your writing and thats directly explains your opinion on the matter.

Drew E!

In the Lady or the Tiger, I think that the princess values her own happiness the most. This is because she would rather have the love of her life die, than watch him be with another woman. What a Meanie!

Revised: In the Lady or the Tiger, I think that the princess values her own happiness the most, because she would rather have the love of her life die, than watch him be with another woman.

I learned that i should follow instructions better. Because at first, i didn't, and i wrote the sentence incorrectly.

topic sentence meganl

The princess values chance because when she moved her right arm it could have meant her right or the young mans right arm.

edited: The princess values trust because she knows that the prince will choose the right door and he trusts her to guide him there.

I learned that I should have made a better point the first time I wrote this sentence.

Brittany J. "Lady or the Tiger" topic sentance

The princess values love, because she was afraid to lose her love and she showed it out of jealousy for the lady behind the door.


Revised: In the story the " Lady or the Tiger", the princess most values love. The princess was afraid to lose her love to the beautiful lady behind the door. In her state of jealousy the princess might have thought of leading him to the door with the tiger, but her love over comes her jealousy as she leads him to the door with the lady.


Revised in final:
In her state of jealousy the princess might have had thought of leading him to the door with the tiger, but her love over comes her jealousy as she leads him to the door with the lady.


What did you learn? I learned that when sometimes when you spend more time thinking about how to write, you come up with more interesting and fluent ways to come about the topic your writing about. I also learned that it helps when you have more than one person who proofreads your writing and gives you comments about it, because it can help you think of the new and creative ways you could come about answering the question. I've learned that when people give you there own opinions about how you can write, they all come together and help you a lot in the long run = )

PeytonM

In the story, " the lady and the tiger" by Frank Stockton the Princess has the most difficult decision, and with this decision comes with a result of what she most values. I believe that the princess most values herself because she does not put in references showing she cares in if the man dies, but she does not show that she could not stand the other maiden in the other door. Showing she does not care what happens to her love.

Revised;
In the story, " the lady and the tiger" by Frank Stockton, the Princess chooses between saving her lover's life or letting him die. The truth lies in the hands of the Princess, does she choose putting herself before him and letting him die, or will she show her love for him and let him live? Soon will be decided.

I learned that i don't necessarily need to have a LONG topic sentence. It doesn't matter with the length of it, because it just needs to have the right length of information, not always just the information of the whole story, I now know that I don't summarize things in the topic sentence just the gist of it.

Lady and the tiger topic sentence

The princess values the people who love her and the attention she gets.


Revise: The princess in the the Lady and the Tiger values her lover even though she may have led him to his death.

I learned to keep you topic sentences more open to detail for better writing through out a page.

Randy E.

In the Lady Or The Tiger. the princess most values her lover and this is shown by the way she is acting about the odds of him dying or being with someone else.