Friday, October 2, 2009

Lady or the Tiger ;)

Princesses are looked upon as royal, respected, and valuable. The princess in "The Lady or the Tiger" most values herself because she would rather see her lover eaten alive then watch him be married to another girl.

Revision:

Princesses are looked upon as royal, respected, and valuable. The princess in "The Lady or the Tiger" most values herself because she would rather see her lover eaten alive then watch him be married to another girl. This princess, like her father, is semi-barbaric which also contributes to her vile decision.

What I learned:
I learned that it is always acceptable to use more detail.

4 comments:

  1. well this is a lot better than mine good job :)

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  2. i agree! something that you could add to make it better would be more detail. Good Job!!!!!!

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  3. your sentence is really good, but its really long, but it is still really good. Good job

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