Friday, October 2, 2009

In the short story The Lady or The Tiger? by frank Stockton the princess values her pride the most because if the lover was married to the girl it would be an insult to her and she often dreamed what she would feel like to have to watch the ceremony.

revised: In the short story The Lady or The Tiger? by Frank Stockton the princess values her pride the most because if the lover was married to the girl it would be an insult to her.

3 comments:

  1. Make it more exciting, when someone reads your topic sentence they should be reeled in and want to keep reading about whatever it is that you have to say.

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  2. This is good but its a run on sentence.

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  3. capitalize "frank" and after the words "an insult to her" put a period. its a run on sentence but other then that, its good!

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