Thursday, October 1, 2009

ErikaK

In the short story "The Lady or The Tiger" by Frank Stockton, the semi-barbaric Princess, most values her pride, in which led her to choose the tiger for her lover; because she could not stand to have her lover with another women.



Revised: In the short story, "The Lady or The Tiger" by Frank Stockton, the semi-barbaric Princess, most values her pride; which led her to choose the tiger for her lover.



What Did You Learn?
I learned that sometimes less is more. Like in my first sentence, I went on and on. My group members told me i could take out some words and it would still have the same effect. Also i think the reason why our topic sentences for "The Utterly Perfect Murder" are better then the ones for "The Lady and The Tiger" is because we had more time and there was an example. Plus we knew that this one was for like a test, so that could have stressed some people out.





3 comments:

  1. I like this a lot. I think you could have eliminated some of the words in here to make it shorter so it's a little shorter

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  2. love the wording and the flewency.

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  3. I like how you made it shorter and cute haha = ) by the way i love the green

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